I close a door,,
driving away a tentative stray of light!
I ponder a thought,,
or two..
A tear falls down my cheek,,
ever so slow!!
The night is long,,
the room is cold!!
"He" is dead,,
you know..
Or so I've been told!!
I close "The door",,
a shiver comes by!!
In awe I wait..
For a breath,,
a smile,,
or a sigh of pure delight!!
No one comes..
No one hears..
Only I remain,,
Only I,,
and some thick white frost!!
It is the fog!!
It is my face,,
And all is lost!!
6 comments:
Oooh baby,
thats very saaaad :(
but I liked it, I hope you are not sad though :)
I understood every word :)
Well sweets, cannot say I am not a little bit not into the "Happy" mood these days, but at least I am not as much sad as the poem!! Close though;)
I am glad you liked it, it is great to understand every word yeah:)))
Love u
ahem...
OH MY GOD!! I second Rawan's comment. Yup! it's very sad :o/
Despite that, it's very soft, tender and dreamy... Feels like a dream...
I love this part:
-----
"I close "The door",,
a shiver comes by!!
In awe I wait..
For a breath,,
a smile,,
or a sigh of pure delight!!"
-----
Your words always hit bullsEYE!! I swear.. Masha'Allah. I can feel the words, sense them... I can even smell the surrounding of your poem! ahem... Am I making sense?
Bravo sweets!! -hugs-
OMG!! Hayati Hadeel now what do I get to say after this overwhelming reaction from you??
-Your words always hit bullsEYE-
ahem ahem this is flattering habebti, thank you thank you thank you:))
And yeah of course you are making sense, 3ad enty akeed you always make sense and you have made me truly happy sweetie, I strongly felt your response to my poem and the effect it has had on you! By the way, it got to me too, this poem precisely and I don't know why, I felt like that kid holding the door knob and waiting!!
-hugs back-
Love you:)))))
love you toooooooooo
Keep your WORDS coming :D
Will do sweets:)))
Post a Comment